How To Write The Death Scene

How To Write The Death Scene


We’ve written about which characters should die and when to kill them in your stories. In this post, we discuss how to write the death scene.

Before you decide to kill characters, we suggest you read: Getting Away With Murder: A 5-Point Plan On How To Kill A Character. If you decide you’re still going ahead, then you need to know how to write the death scene.

How To Write The Death Scene

Death scenes in fiction can be many things. A character’s death can change the reader’s mind, alter the plot’s course, and stand out in the minds of readers for decades.

Writing death scenes are like pizza, or sex. When it’s good, it’s great. If it’s bad, people will remember it decades later (and for all the wrong reasons).

For writers, writing the final moments of a character can be either fun, or extremely challenging.

Here’s how to approach writing the death scene for more captivating scenes in your stories.

Advice For Killing Characters Better

Congratulations, writer: you’ve just decided to whack, kill, eliminate, or execute one of your characters.

Now what?

First, outline the impact it will have on your story’s plot. Are you sure, and what happens next? Proceed once you’ve answered these questions, or risk plot holes and editing regrets later.

Next, use a sheet of paper to consider the finer points. Method, motive, perpetrator, and evidence if this is important to your story.

Here’s how to write the moments of your character’s end.

1. Study The Fictional Death Scene

Fictional deaths are spread throughout many movies, short stories, and books. Read as many of them as you can. Study these scenes with an analytical, editorial mind.

Pick fictional death scenes apart, and note where writers have paid attention to details. What words do they use, or not? Is their method accurate? Do they thank any experts for their research in the liner notes, for example?

For memorable death scenes, look at the death of Helen Burns in Jane Eyre (or Dumbledore’s dramatic demise in Harry Potter & The Deathly Hallows). Find your own favourites, and non-favourites from there.

2. Read More True Crime

After some fictional scene research, get into true crime stories and books. This gives the writer one of the most important things they can have: first person perspective.

Why do people kill? How do people die? What are the thoughts and circumstances surrounding various situations?

Deaths can be accidental, but deaths can also be on purpose.

For a start in true crime, consider writers like Truman Capote, Ann Rule, and Susan Orlean. Then look further, and read more. Remember that newspaper crime pages count here, too, and should be on your reading list.

If you want fiction to be accurate, you also have to study the intricacies of real life.

3. Know Your Method (Well!)

A death scene writer should choose a method of death, and then look to become as familiar with it as possible. Never be vague (or hurried) in your method research – and never!

Research can lead to strange places. Coroner’s reports, first-hand accounts from websites like Reddit, and a lot of medical research.

If something is unlikely or impossible, it’s a badly written death scene.

Be thorough at all times. This is how you research if you want to do it right.

4. Ask Experts Things Often

You’ll notice that writers like Kathy Reichs, Stephen King, and Jean M. Auel (among thousands of others) often thank experts or institutions in their liner notes.

Writers can rely on experts to answer questions about the technicalities of fiction.

Common questions will be:

  1. Can this happen?
  2. Would this happen?
  3. Is this possible?
  4. What would happen if?

Construct your dying scene with experts, and it’s pretty hard to get things wrong.

5. Death (Almost Always) Gets Described In Detail

When people describe real life death, emotions are triggered, and specific words will be used. It’s almost always more detailed than everyday speech. As a writer, use this.

Descriptive words (things like spluttered, spattered, ricocheted, sliced, cut, stabbed, jabbed, or others) belong in the death scene,

Now get some synonym dictionaries ready.

6. The Theory Of Relativity (To Other Scenes)

A death scene is easy to get excited about, and easy for a writer to blow out of proportion. Don’t dress it in too much flowery language. Don’t turn it into an epic.

Good death scenes are statistically relative to the rest of your scenes. Measure it (1) by word count, (2) by readability statistics. Then measure another scene from your book.

Is it too long, too short, or too far from the average readability?

Edit. It’s going to seem out of place.

7. A Place For Grotesque, Or Not

Magazines, literary journals, and publishers can be put off by graphic or gruesome death scenes. Many will mention it in their guidelines. Detailed doesn’t mean gruesome, and doesn’t have to.

Studying death scenes (as step one!) should teach you where this line lies for your story and market.

8. The Where & When Of It

One of the worst death scene mistakes writers make is killing the wrong character at the wrong time. Outlining is recommended, and this way you’ll know what this action does to the rest of your plot.

A character’s death can be a massive impact on where your story goes. Figure out if you’re happy with it before signing their death warrant.

If it doesn’t seem right, move your death scene to somewhere else – or just kill another character instead.

9. Proofreading Death

Expert advice isn’t only for writing the scene. It’s a good idea to return to your expert sources (and resources) once the scene has been written.

Examine your death scene postmorten. Ask the same experts if you, the writer, managed to get it right. Reliable beta readers can also be useful (and paid beta reading is gaining more traction for writers).

Got something wrong?

Don’t stress, just go back to your research, or do some necessary editing.

3 Fatal Mistakes For Writing Death

Here’s a glance at three fatal mistakes writers make when writing death. Of course, try not to make them yourself (and notice when other writers do).

1. Medical Mistakes

Medical mistakes are things that are not physically or medically possible. For example, a victim who has been stabbed in the lung would struggle to talk – but yet, I’ve read hundreds of bad death scenes with long conversations.

If you aren’t sure, search the question online, or ask a medical professional who has dealt with it.

Read: Crime Writer’s Resource – The Human Body After Death

2. Methodical Mistakes

Methodical mistakes are errors in the way your method works. For example, the firing rate of a specific firearm, or the length of a Bowie-knife. Do you know?

Experience can often be legally gained in real life. For example, visit a shooting range, or call a gun expert. Yes, readers will know if you’ve never fired a gun, but tried to write about one.

3. Procedural Mistakes

Procedural mistakes are things that take place after death. The actions of first responders like the police, or like doctors and first-aid professionals. It can even be expanded to the courtroom.

Again, do your research, or ask an experienced expert. These are the best possible ways.

The Last Word

Which death scenes from fiction stand out for being exceptionally good, or terribly bad? What have you learned writing them, and what weird research have you had to take on for it?

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 By Alex J. Coyne. Alex is a writer, proofreader, and regular card player. His features about cards, bridge, and card playing have appeared in Great Bridge Links, Gifts for Card Players, Bridge Canada Magazine, and Caribbean Compass. Get in touch at alexcoyneofficial.com.

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  1. Tina

    Though I’ve definitely seen more bad death scenes in movies than in books, the three fatal mistakes do generate some flashes of really bad ones. Good points for why the first nine headings should be considered!

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