Adverbs Are The Tequila Of Writing Dialogue

Why Adverbs Are The Tequila Of Writing Dialogue

Writers Write is a resource for writers. In this post, we caution you against using too many adverbs in your dialogue.

This is the fourth step in my dialogue series, How To Write Fabulous Dialogue In 5 Easy Steps.

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Today, I want to talk about adverbs and why you should try to avoid them.

Step 4: Just Add Verbs

Adverbs tell us how something was done. You should rather try to show us how it was done. When I talk about adverbs I want you to be pay close attention to the words that end in –ly, namely adverbs of manner. Instead of using these, I want you to try to use verbs, but not any old verb will do. I want you to use strong verbs, for example, stride instead of walk, sprint or race instead of run.

Knowing which verbs to use will be easier if you know your character well. Think of the difference between a woman who strides and a woman who shuffles. Each verb creates a different person or a different scene.

You don’t have to obliterate adverbs, but often they are redundant or could be replaced by a strong verb. Adverbs are the tequila of writing. There is no such thing as one tequila and there is no such thing as one adverb. Once you have used one, more will sneak in. Be careful.

When all is said

That said I want to talk about the word said. Said is awesome. Use it. Don’t replace it with words like admonished or exclaimed. Stephen King recommends using them only 10% of the time. It’s good advice. Said is invisible to a reader.

[Read: Improve Your Dialogue: Remove Those Adverbial Dialogue Tags]

Below is an example of dialogue with adverbs and verbs other than said. I used the prompt: ‘Keep your morals away from me’.

“Don’t do it.” Alice demanded angrily.
“Keep your morals away from me.” Janet said snidely as she stood over John, tightly tied up in the corner.
“You’ve never minded my morals before.” Alice retorted sarcastically.
“Well, I mind them now.” Janet said irritably as she steadied the gun, the weight of it uncomfortably heavy in her inexperienced hand.
“How inconvenient for you that I am here then.  Please, just drop the gun, Janet,” Alice said as seriously as possible. “We both know you are not going to shoot him.”
“I am going to shoot him. I hate him.” Janet said bitterly. Her eyes narrowed dangerously.
John whimpered through his gag and pleaded with his eyes.
“You don’t hate him, you love him. You always have.” Alice said, exasperated.
“No, you are wrong. I used to love him.” She said as she squeezed the trigger.
Now the rewrite:

I have removed adverbs and added action to show, instead of tell.

Why it’s better

Using action makes the story immediate. It also stops you from creating unwieldly words that your reader will have to reread. Look at your last piece of dialogue and try using an action instead of an adverb.

Posted on: 10th February 2016
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1 thought on “Why Adverbs Are The Tequila Of Writing Dialogue”

  1. meghana

    very nice and useful too..benificial to
    inhans vocabulary also…i m not much familier with english…learning…bt i like your post..thank u ..

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